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A Haiku in three verse (5,7,5) for those who are called

lilly

Council Member
Dandelions fluff --
tossed to wayward wind
Clouds float smoothly on
Hungry butterflies settles on bush
Watchful perching Bluebird flies
home

The more I work on it the worse it becomes.. :rolleyes: lol
Your wording is beautiful Addy and I can see how when you went to Bing it could change things quite a bit in your mind saying one can use as many as 21 syllables but if I understand it correctly which I am not sure of anything at this point, however I think Jo asked for 5-7-5 in three verses.

We will get there, well you will, don't know about me.:confused: Me, one breath. lol
 

Addy

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Your wording is beautiful Addy and I can see how when you went to Bing it could change things quite a bit in your mind saying one can use as many as 21 syllables but if I understand it correctly which I am not sure of anything at this point, however I think Jo asked for 5-7-5 in three verses.

We will get there, well you will, don't know about me.:confused: Me, one breath. lol
Thanks, Lilly. You will get it, no doubt about it! One breath... truly unique, I agree! :D
The rules are apparently more lax nowadays -- that is why it is confusing.
 

lilly

Council Member
Who knows maybe Jo didn't mean we had to follow his lead?

I just read Jack's link and I like the way the wording is and I will change how I go about everything tomorrow. I don't give up that easily.:D
 

Addy

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the wind seems so strong
yet gentle on my cheek now
what weather coming​
I am impressed, Lil! Beautiful! :D
Now.. I will have to try one again.. lol.. I haven't been working on it as I intended to do.
:rolleyes:
 

BrianDamage

Council Member
A young soldier cried
On the red-soaked Uniform
A friend from childhood

They laughed together
over an old comic book
The sky was so blue

Eternal summer
Wilson leather and red stitch
Going, going.....gone.
+1. Well done, JO. Pity we can't like posts anymore.
 

lilly

Council Member
I am impressed, Lil! Beautiful! :D
Now.. I will have to try one again.. lol.. I haven't been working on it as I intended to do.
:rolleyes:
Thank you Addy, the phone rang and I just hit submit before adding the rest. I don't know what I am doing.
 

Addy

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nice addy, I just saw now.
Not really, Lil. I just jotted something down quickly. But it says basically what I wanted in one breath. :D
I will work harder on the next one and make it longer as well! I am sitting here thinking mostly of all the things I should be doing..
 

lilly

Council Member
the wind seems so strong
yet gentle on my cheek now
what weather coming

the clouds are darker
lightening shoots across the sky
they are ready to open

now diamonds sparkle
a manifestation glows
a rainbow greeting​
 

Addy

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Very nice lines.. Lil! :cool: I am not sure mine is Haiku though..

But regardless.. still can enjoy the prose in whatever one writes!
 

Addy

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Birds are nesting weed eater
upright safe to stay
Hatched soon mouths upturned
Feathers sprouted
Now free -- to fly away


Footnote: Birds have built a bird nest of moss and grassy straw in the plastic top of my gasoline weed eater. It is standing propped upright in the tool holder inside my garage.. lol .. Home Sweet Home for now!
 

lilly

Council Member
Birds are nesting weed eater
upright safe to stay
Hatched soon mouths upturned
Feathers sprouted
Now free -- to fly a


Footnote: Birds have built a bird nest of mass and grassy straw in the plastic top of my gasoline weed eater. It is standing propped upright in the tool holder inside my garage.. lol .. Home Sweet Home for now!
I have a birds nest outside my window too! Smile Absolutely love your lovely poem
 

lilly

Council Member
Gardens

flower gardens sweet
aroma is heavenly,
I want to stay here

the birds enjoy it
why should I not enjoy too
lilac and jasmen

rhododendrons are
like kisses from the angels
to meet you each day

 

Addy

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Birds are nesting weed eater
upright safe to stay
Hatched soon mouths upturned
Feathers sprouted
Now free -- to fly away


Footnote: Birds have built a bird nest of moss and grassy straw in the plastic top of my gasoline weed eater. It is standing propped upright in the tool holder inside my garage.. lol .. Home Sweet Home for now!

Thanks, Lil. I corrected my typo, make that moss instead of mass.. Thanks, BTW.. Still having doubts about the Haiku style.

There was another nest built in a clay flower pot. It had six baby birds in it -- evidently they left or a pesky little critter got them, not sure. But it irritated me when I checked on the nest and found them gone.

Does your nest have eggs or baby birds in it?
 

Addy

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flower gardens sweet
aroma is heavenly,
I want to stay here

the birds enjoy it
why should I not enjoy too
lilac and jasmen

rhododendrons are
like kisses from the angels
to meet you each day

Beautiful, I like that one very much!
 

Addy

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Summer Night

Dew damp ground cool lays
Fireflies twinkle and flitter
Barking dog distant noise faint
Porch swing barely moves
thoughts adrift
Moments flee unnoticed
 

Addy

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Lilly.. Just a thought maybe we should start a new thread.. :) Looks like we have taken over JO's thread..

Petals wilted litter
Sadly fading
beauty forgotten
Thorns all prickly piercing
Waiting
 
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