Structural problems with Romney's speech

[degsme]

We can debate the facts or lack of facts behind Romney's speech until November, and I suspect we will.

But we can also talk about the STRUCTURE of the speech.

The first 10% or so was about

Then the next 20% or so was about Obama as President

Then about 5% remembering the Presidency of Jack Kennedy - a democrat

Then we have about 25% of a recital of his biography almost in the 3rd person

Then about 20% about how he doesn't hate women

Then 5% more about Obama the President

Then 5% on his own biography

Then 10% on what he would do if elected


I dunno but I think the acceptance speeches of the last 5 Presidents have focussed on THEIR PERSONAL VISION... not what someone else did. Or how their life slipped by

 

[JackDallas]

We can debate the facts or lack of facts behind Romney's speech until November, and I suspect we will.
But we can also talk about the STRUCTURE of the speech.
The first 10% or so was about
Then the next 20% or so was about Obama as President
Then about 5% remembering the Presidency of Jack Kennedy - a democrat
Then we have about 25% of a recital of his biography almost in the 3rd person
Then about 20% about how he doesn't hate women
Then 5% more about Obama the President
Then 5% on his own biography
Then 10% on what he would do if elected
I dunno but I think the acceptance speeches of the last 5 Presidents have focussed on THEIR PERSONAL VISION... not what someone else did. Or how their life slipped by

Yep, fear and desperation is creeping into every post any of you clowns make now. Soon panic will set in and you'll embarrass yourselves even more.

 

[ITALIA]

Got to hand it to you Jack. You are about the only Republican not too embarrassed to show up here after that dude of a convention. Guess nothing can embarrass you.

 

[JackDallas]

Got to hand it to you Jack. You are about the only Republican not too embarrassed to show up here after that dude of a convention. Guess nothing can embarrass you.

Your misperceptions [edited] do not deter me in the least.

 

[degsme]

Your misperceptions, and those of your butt-buddies, do not deter me in the least.

Do you have anything substantive to contribute or are you just doing a disruptive drive by ad hominem?

 

[degsme]

Yep, fear and desperation is creeping into every post any of you clowns make now. Soon panic will set in and you'll embarrass yourselves even more.

Um where is the "fear"?

You are the one not addressing issues and ideas but running around calling people names and making things up.

You are supposedly a good writer.

That means that you supposedly understand the structure of writing something or of text. and yet rather than engage in a discussion of it, you just name call. Seems to me that you could much more effectively show me the fool by addressing my points. That you don't speaks volumes.

Please contribute something substantive.

 

[JackDallas]

Do you have anything substantive to contribute or are you just doing a disruptive drive by ad hominem?

Just the ad hominem attacks. Anything substantive you, and your species, would either not understand or reject out of hand, the truth being, as it is, anathema to a Liberal.

 

[Al Ponzi]

I disagree and here is why......

http://www.washingtonpost.com/polit...575ee6-f2ec-11e1-a612-3cfc842a6d89_print.html

No conservative is ever detered. Some of the fact check quoters are mia today.

 

[Drumcollie]

Cant wait for the Obama structure

50 percent Bush did it not me

40 Percent republicans controlled house fpr two years and wouldnt let me bankrupt country

10 yall didnt do enough to help me

 

[JackDallas]

It was a great speech.

 

[JackDallas]

And the ever popular, "I didn't do a good enough job of communicating."

Cant wait for the Obama structure

50 percent Bush did it not me

40 Percent republicans controlled house fpr two years and wouldnt let me bankrupt country

10 yall didnt do enough to help me

 

[degsme]

Cant wait for the Obama structure

50 percent Bush did it not me

40 Percent republicans controlled house fpr two years and wouldnt let me bankrupt country

10 yall didnt do enough to help me

Ok Lets see if this comes true.

If it does not, I'm going to call you on your bullsh!t

 

[degsme]

I disagree and here is why......

http://www.washingtonpost.com/polit...575ee6-f2ec-11e1-a612-3cfc842a6d89_print.html

No conservative is ever detered. Some of the fact check quoters are mia today.

HUH??? where is your reason? YOu simply repeated the content I linked to earlier.

And Fact Checkers are hardly MIA...

Now I will admit I was estimating the numbers. But if we take it into WORD the wordcount is 4,087 words.

If we look at only where he was talking about President Obama (and even if he is criticizing Obama its still invoking President Obama) it comes to some 1,311 words

A WHOPPING 32%

1145 were about himself and what he has done (though in a wierd 3rd person view) That's 28% (so now we are at 60%)

395 or roughly 10% were about other people including the creepy story about how his mother found out his father was dead (now at 70%)

611 or roughly 15% are the generic pablum about What America Wants, Deserves, Stands for etc (now at 85%)

And that leaves 15% for What Romney promises to do.



That's not a compelling speech - when he gives President Obama MORE AIR TIME than his own story
When he Gives Obama TWICE AS MUCH Airtime as what he himself will do...


Well that's just not a well strucutred story

 

[degsme]

It was a great speech.

and here you were touted as someone who writes well.

He Gave Obama TWICE AS MUCH AIRTIME as what he himself was going to do...

HE Gave Obama as much airtime as he gave his own story.


I guess if that's a great Speech, then I guess this one is basically untouchable

http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2008/08/27/bill-clinton-democratic-c_n_121941.html


Seriously... you know better.